Our Script 1st Draft Read through and feedback

*  Robin says 'Intro' before locations due to a misunderstanding, this is really 'int' or interior. 

Our Actors' Feedback

• Thought some of the actions, for example Violet touching Kevin's arm seemed unnatural and awkward.
• Thought the name of Kevin, didn't seem appropriate, making the message seem trivial.
• The explanation of Dissociative Amnesia isn't clear enough, needs further explanation. 
• The character of Violet is instantly unlikable to the audience, creating suspicion 
• The ending is slightly dubious, did Kevin commit the murders or was he framed?
• Brackets should be added to the script to make it easy to learn/understand

Issues we found in the script because of the read-through

• Julia's monologue seems a little stiff or natural in places and may need rewritten. 
• The title 'Daily Chronicle' doesn't fit well within the monologue.
• Kevin and Violet may need further interaction or explanation, they jump from meeting to being in a relationship.